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This story is beautiful--the swap in narrator as the story unfolded was particularly effective. I'm from New Zealand, and so I really enjoyed the use of local vernacular. I thought the build up of tension was also good, as you could really sense the frustration of the "invisible" recipient of the advice. Who knew car parts could be so poetic! Overall, the subject matter was handled in a unique way, and that's what I really appreciate. The use of several ingenious devices make this series of poems enthralling as well. Thank you for submitting this work, David--you have a new fan!
A wry smile comes to my face as I read this! Thanks for coming up with this authentic, humorous, and gently mischieviosness poem!! The vernacular is exquisite!
I love all the twists.