Ill-Advised Love Poem

by John Yau
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Nice poem, like a long haiku. It was easy to picture your words, with lots of depth to think about once the words are read and said. The snow as sky's pillow is a marvelous metaphor, and the spring swallowing the air makes for a superb ending.

Easy to picture, but hard to grasp. Such an attitude to what could be read as despair!

The scenes the poet applies are familiar for everyone. In my opinion, he is a master of using ordinary subjects to create a great picture in his reader's mind.